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    With everything that's inside of me,
    I wish you would be here with me.
    My heart is aching for your presence
    A whole inside..to be filled only by your essence

    I'll hope one day we'll get to meet,
    At first sight our hearts will wildly beat
    And the distance will be just a bad memory.
    Accomplishing this dream will be so sweet

    I already miss your voice,
    The warmest, softest noise
    To me it's like a melody,
    A lullaby that's meant for me

    You say I'm special, and I want to believe its true
    but if I'm special, what are you?
    You're pure perfection in my eyes,
    A perfection in HIS eyes.

    All I can say is: I MISS YOU.
    And I promise you one day we'll make it through
    but for now all this is just a wish,
    That every day I pray to come true.
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My first poem ever. But mostly it's Manny, he is a great artist and friend.
Check him out! :iconiinegativeii:
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~QuietlyDreaming Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very sweet. You have good rhythm often in the poem, and most importantly emotion. It felt real (:
You have a typo in the first stanza though: "hole" rather than "whole"
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~sunnySIDEofME Oct 31, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you my friend, been off these days.
I'm glad you like it, and sorry for that mistake xD
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~QuietlyDreaming Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww! Don't apologize for a mistake! I have much worse, seen much worse, and fixed much worse. As have you and everybody else.
Besides, a mistake is really just a lesson learned :3
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~IINegativeII Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
just so u know
"hole" was correct
not "whole"
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~vampie-knight-roks Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Good job to you both. It's nice and very, very well written.
He's pretty great. His art is amazing, all the time. Just saying.
Again, good job to you both.
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~sunnySIDEofME Oct 9, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you very much, but I think this is good cuz of him.
He really made this poem so real and deep, well he is good with words!
Thank you! :aww:
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~vampie-knight-roks Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm, you're welcome. He is pretty great at using his words well. :) And so are you. :D
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~sunnySIDEofME Oct 10, 2012  Student Photographer
:blush: Thanks again! :heart:
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~vampie-knight-roks Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
-smiles- You're welcome~
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Mood: Love ~Pokiee Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww this is so sweet, and I can relate to it :aww:
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